MarikBentusi's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Desert-Mayhem: OVERDRIVE]

Something about the sound design felt really muted and like it lacked "punch" when it needed to, but the visuals had a very fun style!

Biborig responds:

Which parts in the sound design do you think needed more punch? I'm looking to learn from this tbh and appreciate the honesty in your review.

[Talking with Edward Elric]

good graphics, bad story

Good graphics, bad story. Not really funny nor surprising, the story (BOY MEETS GIRL) has been done a looooooooooot of times. Also, interesting how little time it takes to turn from stranger to lover... or at least kiss-able person. But okay, enough of the story, I think you know that wasn't the strong point.

Graphical style is quiet nice and clean, I recommend you stick to that style and maybe keep the picture a bit more in motion/action in the future if necessary. I liked the change to chibi-style. Strongest point of your entry and giving you the most points.

Sounds are "basic". No sound effects however (but they might be taken out during the calm music for artistic effect) and the voices were... bad? Sorry, didn't sound very in-situation or anything.

Also, after the squeak, how about immediately showing the unwanted guests for an even more surprising moment?

Compared to the really great entries on NG, this isn't more than 5 points. But keep on making flash movies, you're on a very good train. :)

LovelyKouga responds:

LOL your comment makes me laugh because maybe you didn't read the creators comment? XD It was SUPPOSED to be as cheesy and cliche as possible, so I'm actually rather pleased it got this reaction out of you. XD Also I know you can't really tell, but when it fades out to white when Edward sits down, it's supposed to be a time-skip of a few hours of talking. :)

I agree, too much tweening and not enough frame-by-frame animation. Thanks I'll try harder next time! :D

Yes during the music, no effects at all...but there was the camera sound and record scratch later on after the music stopped. OKAY I am going to do that before I submit this to DeviantART, I think it really WILL look better than the plai white. Thank you! :)

[The Dreaded Play Button]

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Okay, one point for the "preloader", but you know I can't give you much more, right? :P

I think it's a cute idea and ideal if you wanna do a stick movie with a similar style. For everything else, it's too empty, simple and white and this simplicity is what stick movies are famous for, right?
However, it takes too much time until something happens, at least for me. I tried to click on it and when I saw it didn't work I thought "maaan, another retard that didn't test whether the buttons work or not", but then I read your description and looked at it again - but you can't all people expect to act like that.
How about you try this: Make a real button, only it doesn't play to movie. If you click on it, the button will change it's shape a bit to show the user that he "successfully clicked on it". You know, just like clicking a button on your OS, it changes it's shape a bit then, too, right? And then, after clicked, around 1 or 2 seconds after that, let the button trigger the stick-animation. If you can do that, of course xD

I hope that was a bit helpful! The stick looks cute, make sure you put a lot of effort into your movie :D You've got to practise, practise, practise! If there's a new version, feel free to send me a message and I'll take another look at a more progressed version (If you think my advice was helpful that is :p).

Sothleks responds:

Oh trust me, I think that responce was VERY helpful. Like I said, this is my first flash, and I'll take all the advice I can get. The main problem I have is I'm not fluent in flash speak, as it were. I don't know everything there is to know about it, nor do i think I'll learn any time soon. I agree that the button takes too long before anything happens, and that was actually something I planned. I've been in the same position, "ahh some retard..." and thought that it would be something funny that most people would get. Plus, it's something that allows the stick guy to do. Fix the button. which is what he'll have to do.

Again, I'm very greatful for your advice, and I could use all the help I can get. thank you for watching!

--Skeel

[Somewhere On Madness Day]

Happy Madness Day!

The submission wasn't perfect, but hey: Happy Madness Day to everyone! :)

MarcyVF responds:

YEAH! That's the spirit :P

[Sticktion]

moep

This video got potential! Maybe you should improve your graphics and get some "clearer" sound files. But the video itself was cool. ^^ But there are lots like this, you should think of something special... maybe.
Keep it up!

sleeeeep responds:

you are correct, alot like this but ill keep em comin newer and better

[Thanks for all the fish!]

It was okay...

(I gave 6 Sound Points because the music fitted to the video, but was still not too interesting. And there weren't any sounds fitting the enviroment i think....)
The movie was simply pointless... the animations and graphics are well drawn but i think... why did you make this movie and not something other? There are so many serious music videos, I only remember the really bad ones or the ones with humor, like the flat head parade. ^^
Keep up the good work!

Bentusi_Paladin

AntonyC responds:

Heh.
Not an HHGTHG fan are ye?

[Doll Ville -The Nice Guy]

OK, here some questions/critic:

1) Why didn't the girl use the amulett like the "nice guy"? Respectively why did the amulett have not the same power? Why does it only acts like it acted to this "nice guy", risking the life of his old owner. Hmm.
2) Lots of scenes are drawn in profil perspective and the limbs moved too slowly and stiff sometimes. Especially in the fighting scenes...
3) Um, why did the clock go crazy, but nothing other? Car clocks are especially hard bulit, so if it's gone SO crazy, something had also happen to the guy (biological; magnetical fields or something) or the rest of the car (electronical, spark plugs go crazy too or something).
4) The blood was a little bit undetailed... more gradients or something like that.
5) Um... the explosions were every time the same, although the one who causes them, hurts on a other type of resistance (?). So IF there are explosions, they would be seen other. Or maybe when the guy hurts the robot more sparks and otherwise more dust from the ground... Anyway, why are there explosions (Or weren't they explosions?) when you hrut someone? I could only understand it, when the guy hit the robot with the mystical powers... but the other times...

But let's get out of those unimportant minor matters and back to the movie:
The beginning was quiet good, especial the writings were good bounded into the movie sequence. I really liked the atmosphere you put into with the moon... Maybe the guy should be more emotionial when he goes to the girl. Something like: "Oh my god! What happend to her? Everywhere... blood... she... oh my god!"
Anyway, i like the movie. Keep up the good work! :)

reojionline responds:

1. I was thinking like the girl can¡¦t use it because she not the chosen one (LOL)
Any way Ill reveal it if the movie continue to the second part(at least that what I was thinking, I really want to make a long movie like 20 minutes but if you read my note„³ I got bored)
Don¡¦t worry there will be a second part if many people like this.

2. Well that¡¦s me, there more room for improvements don¡¦t you thinks?

3. about the clock? Hm¡Kdefinitely something affecting it like the power of the amulet and the man him self so that¡¦s why. Revealing more will spoil the next episode.

4. The blood? Well there is so many example, actually I don¡¦t really like to create such scene but if you want it I¡¦ll try my best

5. Now the explosion? did you see SF vs. MK 2,Well I was trying to make something like that but the computer soon run very slowly so I reduce the animation and reused in some part and it¡¦s easy for to make a movie .

Whoa that was a lot of writing. Thanks for the review

[Baker Blvd Ep1 (Part1)]

Oh no...

do you know what newgrounds is?! Its a flash portal, not a heap of garbage for real life videos! What we want is flash! Maybe your film is good - but THIS is the wrong place i think. Sorry.

zipperdeaf responds:

Naw son

[Spiderman - Music video]

Nice work :)

Just improve the graphics... i like it, when important persons have the propotions of a child *g Anyway, i think you worked very hard and tried to make some really good work. Wonder whats your next flash :)

GoldenSprite responds:

I wonder too.... I just need an idea.

[Birdy in the Snow]

The yoice is too geeky o,Ô

And the story is... not so good, i think. I see that you have talent, next time you need a better topic.

DM-Demitri responds:

Thank you! For now I'm just working on the technical side of actually making the Flash work and making it available for others to see and comment on. I have alot better story-lines (and alot longer, too) but I didn't want to make those first until I could find and work out some of the other details with the ones I'm not as fond of. Thanks for your support though and I'll keep up the work!
~Demitri